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OET Writing: Sarah Marshall Home Care Letter Correction

In tis lesson, I correct a referral letter for Ms Sarah Marshall, a 73-year-old COPD and hypertensive patient being discharged after a colon polypectomy, and show you how to rewrite it so the audience and purpose are absolutely clear. In this class we focus on: Thinking like the reader, who only sees your letter – not the case notes Making your purpose sentence short and clear: requesting ongoing home care after discharge Getting a logical paragraph structure: Paragraph 1 – purpose Paragraph 2 – key medical & social history (COPD, hypertension, smoking, son’s availability) Paragraph 3 – hospital admission and operation Paragraph 4 – progress, current status, what you want the community team to do Cutting unnecessary details for a home care administrator (ICU stay, intra-operative details, etc.) Keeping your letter within a safe 180–200 word range instead of 270+ Avoiding mixed themes inside one paragraph (history + operation + progress all in one block) You’ll see how I: Move sentences around to create one theme per paragraph Shorten long, wordy descriptions of mobilisation and continence Emphasise what the community team actually needs to do: monitor oxygen, check meds, change dressings, support the son Use natural closing lines like: “I would appreciate it if you could…” instead of vague or over-polite phrases 👩‍⚕️ Who is this for? OET nurses and doctors who want clear guidance on audience and purpose Candidates whose letters are too long and contain irrelevant surgical detail Anyone aiming for Grade B (2/5/5/5/5) and needing better summarising skills 📝 How to use this lesson Watch the original Sarah Marshall letter once. Rewind, pause on each paragraph and rewrite it following my structure. Compare your version with my comments about audience, purpose and paragraphing. Apply the same logic to your own home care / community nursing OET letters. Subscribe to The English Native for more: OET Writing Write Now letter corrections OET Speaking roleplays with model answers Practical grammar and vocabulary training for healthcare professionals Copyright Disclaimer under Section 107 of the Copyright Act 1976: This material is used for purposes of criticism, comment, news reporting, teaching, scholarship, and research. Add me on LinkedIn:   / kevinanthonydean   and my newsletter:   / the-english-native-7379048942426206208   Check out my podcast for OET: https://open.spotify.com/show/70XL891... My general English podcast: https://theenglishnative.com/ My YouTube channel:    / @theenglishnative   And, if you need one to one tuition: https://www.italki.com/en/teacher/107... Transcripts for all my OET episodes here: https://www.notion.so/OET-Speaking-Hu...